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美国大学申请essay范文赏析 要怎么写出来(解析)

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­  美国大学申请ESSAY的写作一直是申请者们关注的热点问题。美国大学的申请ESSAY提供给申请者留下的思考空间非常广阔,基本上不会有什么限制,ESSAY给了我们一个环境,那么怎么去“种”这朵“花”,那是你自己的事情了。

­  然而,很多学生依然拘泥于修饰,这可能跟小学以来养成写作习惯于赞美的缘故,华而不实的居多,那么如何准备美国大学申请ESSAY?不妨先进行角色转换,假如自己是一个美国人,美国人习惯对人进行赞美,但解决问题或者进行叙事论述,他们确实喜欢的是直接,喜欢论据。下面,跟着我们一起来欣赏一篇非常有创意的ESSAY。

­  范文:A Boy’s Firsts

­  The boy is such a common boy. He is so common that only acquaintedfriends can notice him among the crowd; he is so common that he does not changehis girlfriend one time per month, just as those playboys do; and he is socommon that his daily life is no more special than those who listen to rock n’roll, bet for soccer games and seldom clean their rooms.

­  However, the boy is somewhat special.

­  He usually thinks that, his experience and personal achievements,along with his own happiness and grievances, are enough for him to be unique,though he does not have a face as good-looking as Brad Pitt or Keanu Reeves, orwhoever.

­  First Award

­  It was such a surprising gift for a 12-year-old boy to know that hehad won the first prize in the national mathematics competition. The boyclutched the certification and laughed like a sun-flower blooming in a springmorning. He had spent three months preparing for that competition and hadlost5kgweight but he was very happy, as happy as you could imagine. Enjoyingthe pace of enterprising, he began to believe “No pain no gain” that afternoon.

­  First Setback

­  Huddling up in the quilt crying, the boy was introspecting himself.For his haughtiness after achieving the second prize in the National PhysicsCompetition, he deserved the rank of last 5% in the final examination of7thgrade. Wiping up the tears, he set himself a promise of being humble andsober. The boy kept the promise and became a young man of great maturity.

­  First cooking

­  “Quite a tough work.” The boy said to himself, smearing soap on a blister caused by theburning oil. But a small blister never could stop him from doing his “cookingresearch”. The boy stood in front of the gas-stove again, holding apancaketurner in his left hand, he was trying to find out the correct time of addingsalt and the appropriate amount of other flavorings. After so many failures, hefelt that it was not a simple task of cooking out palatable meals, nut achallenge of surpassing himself. When the boy finally finished working one anda half hours later, he put a sweet smile on his dirty face. The boy wrote inhis diary, “keep working and you’ll win.”

­  First Love

­  At the age of 16, the boy fell in love with a smart girl. Eatingice-cream with the girl in the ice-cream bar at the street, walking on theboulevard hand in hand, cycling her home and kissing goodbye, he regarded loveas the holy thing in his life. Thus, the boy demonstrates a love from heart; hecares everyone nearby and wants them to be beatific with their families. Aspeople say, an angelic soul.

­  First Job

­  The extremely hot summer holiday of 16, the boy was excited when hegot a job at the local train station as a ticket-taker. First working day, theboy got up so early that when he arrived at the station, the previousticket-taker was still on his work, in astonishment of the boy’s appearance.But the ticket-taker did not know that, the boy was just so eager as to get onthe job to show that he had grown up.

­  Soon a common college student will he be. A common one that will beassiduous in class and passionate in the basketball court; that will make everyeffort to run for the Chairman of the Student Union but may still face failure;that is no more special than those who spend half a day in libraries and forgetto go to dinner when do researches in labs. But somehow he will be a uniquecollege student, because he will have his own way of fulfilling his dreams.

­  And as you may know, the boy is me.

­  一口气看完了吗?那么我们来品一品它:

­  一、标题:

­  也许,这个标题不算非常特别,但是它引人注目,一个男孩的第一次,可能我们想到更多的是一些“第一次”,联想到我们自己的“第一次”,兴趣自然就产生了!

­  二、结构:

­  结合了“第一次”的标题核心,下面分别以男孩生活、学习及工作中的各个第一次进行阐述,涉及的面比较全,包括感情,给人的感觉非常丰富且完整。

­  三、措词:

­  措词比较洒脱,拖泥带水,既看出一个青年人的活力,又从每个“一次”中发现这个BOY其实不是一般的BOY,他有着一种思想叫做执着与专一!

­  四、思路:

­  学习——生活——感情——工作,这看起来更像一个循环,从学习到工作,中间穿插着我们的日常生活和感情生活,这就是一个完整的人,一个完整的体现!

­  这是一篇非常有创意的essay范文,美国大学申请ESSAY的写作思维要开阔,要创新,但是在实际写作中,我们中国的很多学生却是以过往的过眼云烟式的表面化写作居多,A Boy’s Firsts这篇ESSAY我们就看不到那些虚华的痕迹,这值得我们借鉴。

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